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考研冲刺高速路：英语写作范文之五

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Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should:
1) describe the drawing briefly,
2) explain its intended meaning, and then
3) state your point of view.

As is illustrated in the picture, a couple sleeps on the same bed but they seem to be rather isolated from each other.

Their oral communication has been replaced by online chatting.

This picture reveals the in-depth problem of modern people’s alienation from each other, even among family members.

【第一段是论说文的图画描述段。】
第一句描述了图画的主要内容。
*句子剖析：As引导非限制性定语从句，but连接转折关系的并列复合句。
*be isolated from
第二句是对图画描述的进一步细节挖掘。
*句子剖析：该句为被动语态 be replaced by
*online chatting上网聊天
第三句解释图画寓意。
*reveal …of…揭示…； in-depth，深入的，彻底的； alienation from…疏远，远离

The issue is attributed to two factors.
In the first place, modern people are fully occupied by their work and business, which causes so much tension that little time is left for communication with each other. Everybody is busy all the time because of the pressure of survival in the society, which deprives them of a casual way of life.
In the second place, the prevailing use of the Internet makes it easier for people to contact each other. However, the convenience of sending instant messages to anybody around the world prevents people from the pleasure of the face-to-face communication.
In a sense, the addiction to internet exchange makes humans mechanical.

【第二段是说明原因段。】
第一句是过渡段，引出出现图画现象的原因。
*be attributed to…归因于
第二、三句分析问题产生的第一个原因：生计的压力。
*句子剖析：第二句的主干是Modern people are occupied by...。which引导非限制性定语从句，修饰整个主句。在该定语从句中，又有so…that…结构，that引导结果状语从句。第三句的主干是Everybody is busy…，because of引导原因状语，在状语中，which引导非限制性定语从句，修饰the pressure of survival in the society.
*be occupied by 占据；deprive…of…剥夺
第四、五句分析问题产生的第二个原因：互联网的广泛使用。
*句子剖析：这两句话都是简单句。第四句的主干是The use of …makes it easier for…。第五句的主干是The convenience of…prevents …from…。
*instant messages 即时信息； face-to-face communication面对面的交流

第六句是本段的结论句。
*in a sense在某种意义上；

People should be aware that the modern modes of communication cannot take the place of traditional ones.
If the couple in the drawing continues to behave like this, their close relationship might be ruined, perhaps even becoming the “closest stranger” some day.
Direct communications, in contrast, helps construct more human connections among people.

【第三段是论说文的建议段。】
第一句是本段的主旨句，表明作者的立场：现代沟通工具不能代替传统交流。
*be aware that注意； take the place of…代替
第二句从反面论证过分依赖沟通工具的不利后果。
*句子剖析：该句是复合句，if引导条件状语从句。
*some day有一天

第三句从正面建议直接交流的益处。
*in contrast相比之下

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