托福写作范文：公司应提高员工工作效率和业务熟练度

　　2016年8月16日托福写作考情回顾：

　　Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: The most important investment for a big company is to improve the efficiency and proficiency of its employees?是否同意下列观点： 对于大公司而言，最重要的投资就是提高职员的工作效率和业务的熟练程度?(旧题重现)

　　相关提问：

　　1. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: most businesspeople are motivated only by the desire for more money? 是否同意大多数商人的动力是赚钱?(2008年8月16日)

　　2. Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice. 有人喜欢为大公司工作，有人喜欢为小公司工作，你喜欢哪种选择?

　　主题观点：公司最好的投资是提高员工的工作效率和业务精通程度

　　思路拓展：

　　原创语料库：

　　1. In addition to polishing up the skills of the employees, there are a great many things a company can do to make their businesses more successful. 除了提高公司职员的技能， 公司还可以做很多事情使公司变得更加成功。

　　2. invest in the training of their employees v投资职员的培训

　　3. generate more economic value v创造更多的经济价值

　　4. inject new life into the further development of the corporations v为公司的发展注入新鲜活力

　　点评：inject new life into v注入新鲜活力

　　5. enhance the competitiveness of the firms in the fierce competition v在激烈的竞争中提高工作的竞争力

　　6. Large-scaled enterprises typically have established standards for management and employees and therefore have recognized employee-training programs and standardized dispute resolution strategies. 大型企业有其对于管理和职员的标准，因此，大企业通常有经过时间检验的员工培训项目以及标准化的争端解决策略。

　　7. produce more professionally well-trained staff v 培养更多的专业上训练有素的职员

　　8. employees are less likely to make mistakes v 职员们不太容易犯错误

　　原创范文：

　　首段：背景介绍 争议焦点 作家立场

　　The competition amongst different corporations have become increasingly fierce, therefore, it is not rare to see that some large-scaled companies typically have established standards for management and thus have recognized employee-training programs and standardized dispute resolution strategies. As a result, people have been pondering for many years whether or not the most worthwhile investment is the cultivation of employees’ abilities without reaching any definite consensus. For my part, I strongly insist that with a view to generating more economic value, the companies should sponsor the training for their employees to promote the staff’s efficiency and proficiency. (96)

　　点评：

　　1. it is not rare to see that ……　这一点很常见

　　2. people have been pondering for many years whether or not　…… without reaching any definite consensus 关于是否……，人们思考多年没有达成一致观点

　　3. with a view to doing sth = in order to do sth 为了做……

　　二段：第一个论据支持作家立场：

　　For a start, the reason why I take utilizing the financial budget to prefect the techniques of the employees as the most advantageous alternative is that the motivation of the employees will be highly inspired, in this sense, they can fulfill their tasks efficiently. To illustrate, as an English teacher, I am provided the chance of polishing up my teaching skills in Beijing New Oriental Company every year, I have more working zeal after receiving professional training because the sense of being valued and respected by the corporation I am serving really rewards me. So, my personal experience leads me to believe that highly qualified and frequent trainings enable the workers to devote to the companies more actively, it is conceivable that profits the corporations could make will be greatly increased if their employees have access to regular on-job training opportunities. (141)

　　点评：

　　1. the most advantageous alternative n 最具优势的可选择的方法

　　2. polish up my teaching skills v精进我的教学技能

　　3. the sense of being valued and respected by the corporation I am serving really rewards me 被企业重视和尊敬的感受使我受益

　　4. it is conceivable that 可以想象的是 ……

　　5. have access to regular on-job training opportunities. 可以获得在职培训的机会：

　　二段：第二个论据支持作家立场：

　　In addition, this debate reminds me of my uncle, Paul, who just has a similar experience. He has been carving out his own career after graduating from college. In the past, when the new employees were hired, they needed a long period of time to adapt to the working condition and familiarize themselves with the procedures by observing other experienced employees’ performance. Then，my uncle begun to provide professional course to make them qualified adequately. Hence, new employees are less likely to commit blunders and more likely to excel in the work obligation quickly. The experience from life tells us a truth that optimizing the skills of the workers can, to large extent，help the companies to compete for the lion’s share in the market. (127)

　　点评：

　　1. He has been carving out his own career 他一直在自我创业

　　2. new employees are less likely to commit blunders 新员工不太容易犯大错

　　点评：commit blunders = make mistakes v 犯错误

　　3. excel in the work obligation v更加精通工作

　　点评：be proficient at = be well-versed in = excel in v 精通于……

　　4. optimizing the skills of the workers v 改善职员技能

　　5. help the companies to compete for the lion’s share in the market v帮助企业竞争市场中最大的份儿(比喻用法：指提高企业的经济效益：可以写作广告)

　　三段：让步段：除了提高职员技能效率，公司还有何种投资是有价值的，再加以反驳

　　However, I have to concede that there are a great many things a company can do to prosper and stabilize their businesses. More precisely， companies can allocate the financial budget to advertisement of the relevant products or betterment of the equipment. Notwithstanding all that, it is the individual who has the most integral role to play in the companies, the benefits other activities can bring about are obviously dwarfed. (63)

　　点评：

　　1. prosper and stabilize their businesses v 繁荣和稳定企业

　　2. allocate the financial budget to v 把财政预算分配给 ……

　　3. notwithstanding all that 虽然如此

　　4. has the most integral role to play in …… 可以发挥最重要的作用

　　5. the benefits other activities can bring about are obviously dwarfed. 企业其他行为可以带来的利好明显微不足道

　　点评：dwarf v 使显得矮小：

　　尾段：再次亮明观点 总结理由

　　Overall, I would like to re-affirm my conviction that the most essential investment is the betterment of the employees’ skills because workers’ motivation can be highly stimulated provided that they are proficient at the tasks in which they are doing. In light of this statement，only when the business owners make efforts to perfect the efficiency and proficiency of their employees can the companies maximize their economic profits. (68)

　　点评：

　　1. workers’ motivation can be highly stimulated 职员的工作动机会被激发

　　2. are proficient at the tasks in which they are doing v 精通于正在从事的工作

　　3. companies maximize their economic profits 企业可以实现利润的最大化

　　全文点评：本文主题明确;逻辑清晰;细节展开;字数饱满;词汇亮点;句法多变，可作为考生研习和赏析之范文。

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